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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you, @Maureen Doallas, for this restack

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Thank you for restacking this, @Alison Redford

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Thank you for restacking this poem, @Kathleen Hobbs

Kathleen Hobbs's avatar

Your welcome Paul

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Thank you for restacking this poem, @Kimberly Root

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Thanks for this restack, @Portia

Martin Mc Carthy's avatar

This poem has a great rhythm and sounds good. Reminds me a bit of early Eliot, pondering whether to act on his feelings of desire or not.

Is the amber light preparing his to stop or go? That's the question! Seems like he's going to settle for whatever is on offer.

Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Make hay while the sun shines, Martin . Thank you! 😊

Richbee's avatar

Takes me places to times hands multiplied finger tick tock around the clock. Perhaps one more summer fling.

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Maybe a reason to look forward to Summer that has not yet arrived, Richbee!

Richbee's avatar

Amber is a yellow light. Caution. What will be will get here too soon. The clock ticks too fast. Even seeds planted germinate overnight.

Adrião Pereira da Cunha's avatar

This poem feels like someone wanting someone so badly that it scares them a little.

There’s heat in the opening lines, but underneath it you can feel the doubt already forming.

I felt that sting when he thinks about the lovers who came before — that fear of being just another name in a story.

The idea of someone turning past love into a joke hits hard because it’s such a real, quiet fear.

There’s something painfully human in wondering if you’ll be dismissed the same way.

The question about pleasure being something to “take” feels like someone trying to protect themselves while still leaning in.

The ending has this tired, almost resigned tone — like he knows he might get hurt but can’t walk away from the pull.

It’s desire mixed with self‑doubt, longing tangled with self‑defense.

You can feel him bracing for the worst even as he reaches out.

By the last line, it feels like someone whispering, “I’ll take what you give… even if it costs me.”

Paul Wittenberger's avatar

The poem does have a kind of “what’s the worst that can happen” feel to it, Adrião, as if the opportunity might not arise again so best take it now. The cautionary amber light is flashing at the intersection but the speaker chooses to drive through anyway.

Thank you for reading and commenting.

Ronald Drimmel's avatar

For some reason this one reminded me of a poem by Edna St. Vincent Millay.

https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/46557/what-lips-my-lips-have-kissed-and-where-and-why

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Thank you for reading and commenting, Ron. Thanks for posting the link to the Millay poem. I wasn’t familiar with that particular poem, but I sense some similarity in the tone.

Jordan Elings's avatar

Such a heartbreaking story in this piece. I'm also surprised to see a rhyming poem from you. All in all, very well done as per usual Paul.

Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you, Jordan—sometimes I get carried away!

Jordan Elings's avatar

I see it more as writing with incredible depth personally.

Alia Parker's avatar

That was lovely to listen to, Paul.

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Thank you, Alia.

Jo-Ann Petrarca's avatar

Are we thinking of tanned beauties? No idea, but it sounded good to me! Thank you, Paul!

Patris's avatar

I won’t try to define it .. when thinking of desire I can’t.

Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thanks to @KathieOC for sharing this poem.

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Thank you for restacking this, @Patricia Andrews (WA)

Elham Sarikhani's avatar

Your poem carries the ache of desire shadowed by self-knowledge. Devastating and beautiful.