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Martin Mc Carthy's avatar

I read this poem before, Paul, and it stuck me then as being a masterpiece of observation - each person on the platform with a whole life, a whole poem to offer in their own right. If only you could write them all - what a project that would be!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Yes, I posted this before. I wanted it to speak to what the poet saw from their end of the platform, observations, thoughts, while being among those coming and going. Everybody has a story, most people have several, and all people have at least one poem! Thanks for reading again, Martin.

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Martin Mc Carthy's avatar

Terrific poem, Paul. So worth reading again!

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Weston Parker's avatar

I agree with everything Martin said, first rate stuff Paul.

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Ken Macko's avatar

As a retired train conductor, this certainly resonates. You paint a great picture.

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

I take that as high praise, Ken! 😊

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Deni's avatar

Love rail stations, great poem really captures the atmosphere 👍🏻🚂

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

I visited the UK years ago and I loved the rail stations, Deni. Thank you!

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B Philippe's avatar

Glad you reposted this for us to discover - beautifully written.

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

You’re welcome, B. Thank you for reading and commenting.

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Kathleen Hobbs's avatar

I love this poem. Everything you see and everything you hear ends up in a beautiful story or poem for all of us to enjoy.

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Gary Spangler's avatar

This is a dandy, Paul! Almost a sense of urgency as your words hasten to the final conclusion. Prophetic!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you, Gary. I was trying to build a bit of movement toward the end, like a train slowly leaving the station.

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Gary Spangler's avatar

Success, Paul!

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Yolanda D.'s avatar

Magnificent! PAUL, such a lovely poem! I love how you captured the ambiance and the descriptions of your characters.

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you, Yolanda. I tried to think of the kinds of people I saw at train stations.

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Sue Cauhape's avatar

What a gem! You've caught the bounty of life that feeds a writer's pen. Bravo!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you, Sue. Passenger trains passed through my town many years ago, when I was a child. Now the station is still here but only cargo trains passed through through now.

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Sue Cauhape's avatar

I was only about seven when one of my cousins traveled by train for a mission. Steam locomotives then with the huge, rumbling black engines. Then a high school friend traveled to meet her husband for a move to Guam on a diesel train. Times are changing.

I liked the picture you used. Is it AI? It's really evocative for your poem.

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

The image is AI generated, Sue

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Geraldine A. V. Hughes's avatar

I love trains and lived in Palmer Lake CO, the cargo and coal trains heading north and south, whistled through, every day 24/7, fairly slowly, dinging in the midnight, I didn’t mind there’s something nostalgic in my bones from my hillbilly family, those West Virginia mountains and my coal mining grandpa, Missy G a coal miners granddaughter.

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

I frequently hear the cargo train air horn at 4:15am or so each morning.

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

The platform in the illustration is similar to the old train station platform in my hometown (no longer in use).

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Geraldine A. V. Hughes's avatar

Oh yeah, and I jumped a train while living in Ashland Oregon and attending Southern Oregon State College, that’s where Medford showed up on my radar. I will tell you my story later. Have yourself a spectacular day.

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Geraldine A. V. Hughes's avatar

I’ll take a photo of the train station, minus platform, here in town, it will be my first!

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Jane Deegan's avatar

Love how you captured all of this!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you, Jane.

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Michael Drummond's avatar

What sublime writing! Fantastic!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you, Michael, for reading and commenting.

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Grace Drigo's avatar

Like Martin, I also remember this poem. I love trains and its rhythm and rhyme, and how it flows so easily when read aloud. Just fantastic. 🩵

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you for reading again, Grace!

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Susan OBrien's avatar

Nice

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you, Susan!

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School of Blue's avatar

Exquisite, Paul. Enchanted!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you for reading and commenting, Richard!

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Rea de Miranda's avatar

You bring back so many memories, Paul. A lovely nostalgic piece.

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you, Rea!

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Mohika Mudgal's avatar

Paul, wow!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thanks for reading and commenting, Mo—Wow!

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Douglas L. Peck's avatar

Great poem and illustration!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Hey, Doug, thanks for stopping by. The illustration is AI generated. I might have used Substack’s engine—I can’t remember.

How is your music coming along? If you ever see anything of mine worth setting to music, feel free. 😊

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Douglas L. Peck's avatar

Here's where I am with my Suno AI songs (you're a prominent artist - it's a great pleasure to put your wonderful poems to music with this AI tool (and I always make sure the artists get top billing in the title, as well as a few of my own).

https://liveyosemite.wordpress.com/2025/06/10/sunoai-songs/

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

I’ll give them a listen, Doug—thanks for sharing them!

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