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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you for sharing this poem, @Simone Senisin

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Thanks for the restack, @Ray Sweatman

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Thank you, @Teresa Gonzales

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July 2, @Gary Spangler—June sure disappeared quickly enough—Thanks for sharing this poem.

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Have an enjoyable Fourth of July, Paul!

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You do the same Gary. Our city had its 4th of July parade last Saturday. Go Figure!

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Thanks to @Blue Citizen 77 and Diane for this restack 💙💙

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Thank you for sharing this poem, @Portia

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Thanks for the share, @Stanley Wotring

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This is a poem about a man living in the hope that the miracle he desires will come, but knowing from experience that it simply refuses to do so. It's nonarrival is the one thing he has stoically learned to trust and rely upon, almost like a perpetually absent friend.

The day arranges itself

around that absence,

light falling where nothing stands,

a chair pulled slightly back

from no one.

On a side-note, I think that many ladies on Substack would like to fill that empty chair, so I wouldn't entirely rule out hope of a companion piece to this just yet!

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Thank you, Martin. I think the speaker has been shaped so completely by what is missing in his life, that he can’t be present for what is actually there. The waiting is all he knows.

Martin Mc Carthy's avatar

That’s the impression I had of him; and yet, we must leave room for miracles because everything is as it is until something happens that might change it. Of course, if he is no longer present, like some form of zombie, that becomes more difficult.

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I think you’re right, Martin. He needs something—maybe that miracle you talk about—that will tear him away from a preoccupation that doesn’t allow him to be totally present in his own life.

Richbee's avatar

Cyclical spin, well woven wait . Yet weigh less and easily lifts the tension bar. Tickles the ribs to no end in sight. The bus stop, but no one’s ever there. À sign of hope that one day someone will arrive.

Thanks for my morning insomniac read.

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One day someone will arrive, Richbee. And you will sleep the better for it.

Richbee's avatar

Already been there like your optimism.

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You're allowed more than one.

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Once’s enough.

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My situation, too!

Richbee's avatar

Like football(soccer) GOAL!

Paul McCutchen's avatar

It is like waiting for a relative to bring a turkey for Thanksgiving, they said they would bring, then show up with nothing but an excuse. You get mad at yourself because you knew they were not going to bring the turkey. When they say, "Trust me, this time I will bring the turkey."

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Next time, don't invite them or their excuses for Thanksgiving. Or Christmas.

Antonio Castellaneta's avatar

This feels less like a poem about waiting than a meditation on how absence quietly reshapes identity. “The form waiting takes when it is given no end” is a remarkable closing insight. It lingers long after the final line. Thank you for sharing such a quiet and deeply thoughtful piece.

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Thank you for reading, Antonio, and for your insightful comment. I do think that identity is shaped by many forces, especially by the active presence of love, understanding, friendship, sincerity, compassion, which have the power to move identity in one direction. When these same forces are absent or lacking, I think identity develops differently. I don’t necessarily mean differently in the negative sense, simply that the presence or lack of these forces is apt to shape our identity in different ways.

Lev Raphael's avatar

This reminds me of the time a writer I knew told me that he had been asked to review my first book for the NYTBR. So, every Sunday for months, I waited. It was awful, and the problem was they shouldn't have asked him because he had blurbed the book. He pointed that out (how did they not know?) and his contact said "OK, we'll find someone else." What happened next, nobody knows. I did finally get reviewed in the NYTBR six years later, but it was a terrible experience amazingly like what you limn in this stark, beautiful poem.

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Waiting is one thing. What arrives may be something less that you were waiting for.

Thank you, Lev, for reading and commenting.

Wild Lion*esses Pride by Jay's avatar

Paul, your poem stayed with me, partly because I kept stumbling over it. At first I thought it was the many negations. As I sat with it, I realized something else was happening.

Your poem expresses absence through comparison: what does not come, what does not happen, what does not reach. My own writing keeps searching for a different path. I try to describe what is present, even when I am writing about trauma, grief, or loss. I want the reader to encounter the landscape shaped by the absence rather than the absence through its opposite.

Our dialogue made me realize something about my own philosophy of language. Difference describes. Comparison begins telling a story. Once language starts comparing, it quietly introduces a frame, a standard, a hidden “compared to what?” Your poem showed me how differently we approach the same human experience.

Thank you for giving me a poem that became less a destination than a doorway. I ended up learning something about my own voice.

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What a wonderful comment to read the morning of this first day of July. Thank you, Jay—it means a lot to me.

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Your comment made me smile 😊

Anastasia Palmer Johnson's avatar

Ouch, ❤️‍🩹 so painful and yet beautiful

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Hello, Ana, thank you for stopping by, and thanks for reading and commenting! ❤️😊

Earl Nobdy's avatar

“His grimed hands lying light in the quiet interstices” -Faulkner

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Have you ever noticed that we tend to concern ourselves more with what we don’t have than content ourselves with what we do have?

Portia's avatar

Tell me about it! Reading this wonderful poem is a sobering experience.

Daniel A Detwiler Ph.D.'s avatar

I think Albert Camus and Samuel Beckett are applauding this poem, Paul. I am as well. Daniel

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Both fascinating thinkers and writers, Daniel. Honored to be considered in the same sentence.