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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thanks for sharing this poem, @Keifer Allan

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Thank you, @Abigail George, for sharing this poem.

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Thanks for this restack, @Portia

Portia's avatar

Thank you for your gorgeous poem, Paul.

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Thanks to @Blue Citizen 77 and Diane for sharing this poem 💙💙

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Thanks for sharing this poem, @Earl Nobdy. Can’t say I like the voiceover, though. I must have pressed a wrong button somewhere…

Wild Lion*esses Pride by Jay's avatar

Paul, I can feel every word like they are mine. You have been able to give loving grief new words.

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I consider that high praise, Jay. Thank you!

Alison Redford's avatar

Thank you. Well said, and I agree. I was going to comment something similar, but yours is really perfect.

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High praise, indeed, Alison. Thank you for reading and commenting, and for your continued support!

Alison Redford's avatar

In these days of perfect lives for whatever social people are performing, there is a lack of understanding that time doesn't heal all wounds, or at least, not completely. When someone else understands or shares the experience, it's so helpful.

Wild Lion*esses Pride by Jay's avatar

Alison, thank you, your words speak to the universality of feelings. We are never alone in them, aren’t we?

Martin Mc Carthy's avatar

I learn something new on Substack every day, and today was no exception. I looked at this poem and said to myself, what does “synedoche” mean? So I looked it up and found that it’s a figure of speech in which a part of something is used to represent the whole, and immediately the first two lines had their perfect context:

“My hands still recall

what the rest of me forgets”

Then the poem proceeds from there, with the speaker naming individual gestures and aching body parts that now represent a whole lost relationship, in a work of sublime symmetry:

“Every part of me still aches

in the name of the whole.”

Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Thank you, Martin, for reading and commenting. Like “Enjambment,” published earlier this month, synecdoche is another figure of speech or literary device that I wanted to treat in a poem. I also have poems planned for simile and metaphor, which I’ll get around to posting sometime soon.

Martin Mc Carthy's avatar

I liked this poem and I liked "Enjambment" also, so I look forward to reading and commenting on the other two in due course.

Richbee's avatar

The pulse is steady.

Then quickens.

The indention is is filled

With warm radiation

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Thank you, Richbee. Your comment is a most welcome sign of warmth, perhaps even healing. 🙏😊

Richbee's avatar

Makes up for yesterdays

Richbee's avatar

Dictionary spelling. Not in NY.

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I missed the 'C" in posting this. Thank you, Richbee--I've corrected it.

Richbee's avatar

Synecdoche ?

C.J. Heck's avatar

A beautiful poem about the memory of loving. That's an emotion that runs deep, something you write about so well, Paul. A pleasure, as always.

Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Good morning, C.J., and thank you for reading and commenting. Loss of any kind is bound to cause grief or discomfort or pain, but loss of love or loss of a loved one sort of bruises the soul. Of course, the bruise may fade, only to be replaced by a dull ache that lingers on just below the skin.

C.J. Heck's avatar

You’re welcome, Paul. Your observation is so true. Any loss of a loved one is very much like a bruise that fades in time. But like you said, the ache is there forever.

Simone Senisin's avatar

I feel the ache Paul, beautiful poem. 💖

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Thank you, Simone.

Richard Hogan, MD, PhD(2), DBA's avatar

Paul’s poem reads like a small Mass of the body, where the hands become monks keeping vigil over what love once consecrated. Memory rises in it like incense—quiet, persistent—filling the ribs with a presence that refuses to fade. The poem understands that the sacred lives in gestures, that tenderness is a kind of sacrament, and that without it, the flesh is stripped of its holiness. In a few spare strokes, he gives us a liturgy of what the body remembers long after the soul has tried to forget.

—Simply Richard

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I think that’s it, Richard—just so.

Patris's avatar

Exquisite pain reaches the deepest.

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So does love, Patris.

Patris's avatar

absolutely true, Paul..

Patricia Andrews (WA)'s avatar

😓

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Here’s a 🌻to chase away any ache my poem caused. 😊

Jo-Ann Petrarca's avatar

🥲

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We try our best to live with loss, Jo-Ann. In my own life, I think that death and loss of love are running neck and neck when it comes to the kind of deep emotional ache that loss causes. I’m probably not alone.

Jo-Ann Petrarca's avatar

I understand and have lost so many friends from the ages 37-69 and all ages in between. But I cannot imagine losing a partner. My daughter lost her husband at 46, and they were married 16 years, so sad.

Rea de Miranda's avatar

This is beautiful, Paul!

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Good Wednesday, Rea, and thank you!

Stanley Wotring's avatar

Sensual!

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Thank you, Stanley