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Nov 10, 2023·edited Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

This had me at blue o'clock and just got better and better with so many wonderful words and names. A squeem of fish! Marvelous.

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Thank you, Jonathan !

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I plan on stealing every one of them words

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If you see a small school of fish moving quickly underwater, grouped together so the bodies look like a sort of amorphous silvery gel sliding along, that’s a squeem.

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Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

I had to google, like, ten of them.

Frankly, even if I hadn't to-would I know? I forgot all...

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“I am like the lake” and “squeem” !!!

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Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

I love “squeem” too 😄

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yeah, I'm definitely stealing that one :)

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Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

That is lovely. I wish I lived THERE! All we have in the city is a squeem (what a great word I shall use forever more) of traffic.

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Traffic passes quickly in an amorphous blur? Having lived in Los Angeles and environs I can relate to that.

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Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

It still does out here in the wilderness of L. A.

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Nov 11, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

Beautiful, I loved it. Keep writing and make our day..

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Nov 11, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

I love this piece, Paul, as I absolutely love those early morning moments! You've captured this moment beautifully!

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Thank you, Rich!

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Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

This is all feeling and stars

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Feelings and stars should be there for us always, Patris-Thank you!

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Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

Yes - and thank you for reminding us Paul. A poets true vocation, yes?

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All writers, I think.

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Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

The best ones

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Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

This whole poem took me back to the many times and places I’ve camped all over our great country. “Blue o’clock” . Lovely.🥰

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Thank you so much!

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Lovely phrase “at blue o’clock”! I wish it were mine! It would be perfect for my Substack!

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Take it and use it, Diane. It’s free!

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Thanks, Paul! 🦋

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Paul this is wonderful! I grew up on a very large lake and this took me home 🥰 love it!

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Glad you connected with it, Pamela! I think everyone has a place like that.

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Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

Those last tree lines ... love you!

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Thank you, Berkana!

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Those last three lines.... loved this Paul!

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Thank you, Reena - That’s my favorite moment in the piece.

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So marvelous, I have no words. That is a rare moment for me.

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Thank you, Stanley!

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Call me Stan.

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Will do, Stan!

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This is such a fine poem. I've read it many times. The images & lines are amazing. Thank you, Paul!

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Thank You, Karen-Much appreciated!

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The lines & images in this poem are amazing, blow the top of my head off. Thank you!

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Nov 10, 2023Liked by Paul Wittenberger

Wow

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Thank you for restacking!

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